I love the mix of pathos and humour. I also love how you use the language- keeping it alive and interesting- rather than resorting to the boring stock phrases usually associated with the experience of grief. Also: I like how you don’t ever shy away from letting your protagonist be slightly ridiculous in his self exposed machinations.
Very wordy, and obviously the author is well-educated. Sentences like: Thereafter, I was able to report its location to my interlocutors, and thereby give my family tragedy the material objects to which an audience attaches their sentiments; indeed, I would say such things as “my little sister and I often go and sit there and talk about the things we used to do with dad,” although no such thing ever occurred.
The sentence above reads like it was written in the 19th century. In other words, it is hard to wade through all the words and their meaning.
And the sunglasses! Nice touch.
I love the mix of pathos and humour. I also love how you use the language- keeping it alive and interesting- rather than resorting to the boring stock phrases usually associated with the experience of grief. Also: I like how you don’t ever shy away from letting your protagonist be slightly ridiculous in his self exposed machinations.
Dearest Torben,
What a tenderly written piece. We remember your Dad so well … a good man, seeker of knowledge , gentle.
He sure loved you all.
Your family brings back the best of memories mixed with the tragedy of your Dad leaving this earth.
We were blessed to have you in one of our life’s chapters and hopefully one day we can hug.
Love to you all❤️❤️❤️
Carpe Diem, dear Torben.
Valerie, Gerry and Amelia
Very wordy, and obviously the author is well-educated. Sentences like: Thereafter, I was able to report its location to my interlocutors, and thereby give my family tragedy the material objects to which an audience attaches their sentiments; indeed, I would say such things as “my little sister and I often go and sit there and talk about the things we used to do with dad,” although no such thing ever occurred.
The sentence above reads like it was written in the 19th century. In other words, it is hard to wade through all the words and their meaning.